Successfull sports stars and glamourous film stars are a role model for youngsters.Do you you support it or not?

Essay topics: Successfull sports stars and glamourous film stars are a role model for youngsters.Do you you support it or not?

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Many argue that film stars,sportsman are the role model for our generation or not? According to me, film stars are well known to us because of their luxuraious life style,The youngster are the one's who influenced by them are most.

Some times this nature of influence make them bad as these celebrities captured on camera while taking alcohol and drugs.So this directly imapact their fans who are following them without using their brain.They think these are persons are the Best people of their society,So what ever they are doing is the best thing any one can do.

In the film industry and sports if we find there are some celebrities who are the real stars for example if we talk about Mr.amitabh bachhan then he is one of the legendry actor of bollywood and also he is the brand ambesedor of "Beti bachao beti padhao" which works on the education of the girls and their development.

So Now we can conclude that every body is not good always it's our duty to identify the person to whom we are going to follow is capable of that or not. we can judge a person only by his acting or sport.There are many thing we need to know about a person before making him as a ideal champ.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...now about a person before making him as a ideal champ.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229787234043 0.268076937826 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.178723404255 0.116061578633 154% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0425531914894 0.0759168565197 56% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0553191489362 0.0366838410393 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.102127659574 0.0131127313244 779% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114893617021 0.155750635184 74% => OK
Participles: 0.0340425531915 0.0379272487307 90% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.46452453281 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0255319148936 0.0210936926555 121% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.106382978723 0.0948980150116 112% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0127659574468 0.00437022459523 292% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0255319148936 0.00967000014798 264% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1194.0 1161.00487805 103% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.9 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52777777778 5.90752243213 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73763899035 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.236111111111 0.337110787985 70% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.166666666667 0.247514529752 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.12962962963 0.171178102325 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0972222222222 0.112407865282 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46452453281 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 106.607317073 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62037037037 0.546246751206 114% => OK
Word variations: 63.1675015663 49.3433353143 128% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 8.93414634146 67% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0094962315 156% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.6740611535 42.9750493124 227% => OK
Chars per sentence: 199.0 135.714022679 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 23.0094962315 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.16666666667 0.689975730869 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.48048780488 878% => OK
Readability: 52.6666666667 47.7609492067 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.12658227848 2.94281807926 38% => Essaays need to be developed more elegantly.

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182713583974 0.418131533498 44% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.187966840252 0.181151798455 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0348700315017 0.0850326197045 41% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.816491523651 0.706616315825 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147973728778 0.157042692854 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122442712112 0.228904883108 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095377072712 0.108899403657 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.220519505772 0.367819155151 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0434193969134 0.0812612215331 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124948706215 0.316326947829 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751689868759 0.0921553760075 82% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70731707317 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.14146341463 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.08536585366 24% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.16585365854 126% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 0.956097560976 105% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 7.1512195122 84% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

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