The table below gives information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university in 2011. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the proportion of students in three different groups studying in six different fields in an Australian university in 2011.
A cursory glance at the diagram is enough to make it clear that females accounted for the highest proportion of students studying humanities, education and science in the given year.
According to the diagram, the percentage of female students studying humanities in 2011, which was the majority of students in this college, was much higher than those who had first language which is not English and those who were born outside Australia which were 12% and 20% respectively. Similar to this, out of the education, there was 68%, 16% and 23% of students who are female, students whose first language is not English and who were not born in Australia respectively. Moreover, there was a moderate difference between the proportion of students from these groups in studying science as well as physics. To be more specific, 52% of total students studying science were females, whereas 45% for students with first language not English and 31% for students born outside Australia. Also, in physics, there was 56%, 38%, 56% respectively.
In contrast, females who studied information technology was 17% and studied engineering was 15%, which is much lower than the rate of students born outside Australia in these fields (56% and 48% respectively)
Overall, it is interesting to note that students who are females in this college had a tendency to choose humanities, education, science, physics to learn rather than information technology and engineering in this year.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, well, whereas, in contrast, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 3.15609756098 412% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 965.302439024 141% => OK
No of words: 258.0 196.424390244 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26744186047 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83534748503 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480620155039 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 397.8 283.868780488 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.980649535 43.030603864 249% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 169.875 112.824112599 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.25 22.9334400587 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.23603664747 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184390197852 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919391641582 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751829835162 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126285409083 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739673338564 0.0819641961636 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.2329268293 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 61.2550243902 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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