The table below shows some data regarding Australia's nursing employment and total workforce in 1987 and 2001.
this challenging world, every businessmen are trying to promote their products or services in every possible way to amplify their business. some schools believe that earning by promoting fast food outlets and supermarkets makes a constructive progress whilst some think it is deleterious for school and students. In my opinion, this statement has both positive and negative consequences and I tend to believe that it can affect both, negatively and positively for several reasons.
First and foremost, extra funding helps for development of school and aiding students with better facilities. schools can bring added facilities to students like digital boards, computer rooms, library, hiring qualified teachers for teaching foreign language and arts, introducing martial arts. this investment presumably will promote children’s progress during studying in school and apparently they will have a much more competitive advantage than other pupils. Indeed teachers will also be motivated by getting well paid. Additionally, schools can raise the spirits of students and prepare them to take part in competitive exams held between different schools and arrange prominent coaching in these competitions through skilled coach by paying a hefty amount of salary to them. Furthermore, super markets or fast food joints can attract new customers and stimulate their sales.
Nowadays, instant food is cheaper than school canteen food, however, we cannot overlook the negative impacts of the same. Firstly, fast foods are rich in carbohydrates and sodium which hampers the health of growing child. these foods act like slow poison to deteriorate child’s health and later in life can convert in chronic diseases like Cancer. it is human nature to get addicted to bad things faster, similarly, children can get addicted to such foods which are not meant for daily consumption.
In conclusion, the health of youth is wealth of nation and this must have utmost importance. Government should put restrictions on such goods which are harmful for students in long run. schools should adopt other methods to raise funds which are not at the cost of student’s health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, similarly, so, well, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 1.00243902439 1297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 6.8 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 965.302439024 191% => OK
No of words: 334.0 196.424390244 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52095808383 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79281462803 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 106.607317073 203% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646706586826 0.547539520022 118% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 283.868780488 189% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8187996429 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.23603664747 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0114000525622 0.215688989381 5% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00375521518169 0.103423049105 4% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0145438858601 0.0843802449381 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00805984818243 0.15604864568 5% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139600665533 0.0819641961636 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 40.7170731707 253% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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