The table gives information about the average hours spent per weak in front of the computer by people of different age group in China

Essay topics:

The table gives information about the average hours spent per weak in front of the computer by people of different age group in China.

The provided tabular chart illustrates the information about the Chinease people of various ages who visited their average time in front of the computer screen. The data has been calibrated in hours.

At a first glance, it can be observed that at the of 10-15 boys consumed 10 hours were in front of computer screen while 24 hours were wasted by adult boys at the age of 16-20 in China. Although, men spent 12 hours in front of computer screen whereas men were visited 9 hours by age group 26-30. While at the age of 31-50 and 51+ were spent approximately same hours in front of computer which were 8 and 7 hours respectively.

However, at the age of 10-15 mostly girls were consumed 8 hours on computer while adult girls wasted their time on computer that was 23 hours as well as they spent 10 hours on computer by 21-25. Although, women were exactly same hours consumed on computer at the age of 26-30 and 31-50 which were 9 hours. Whereas old women were spent 8 hours in front of computer screen.

Overall, it is clear that at the age of 16-20 both genders were spent maximum time in front of computer screen while least time was consumed by age group of 51+.

Votes
Average: 5.9 (3 votes)

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... at the age of 16-20 in China. Although, men spent 12 hours in front of computer ...
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...10 hours on computer by 21-25. Although, women were exactly same hours consumed o...
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... of 26-30 and 31-50 which were 9 hours. Whereas old women were spent 8 hours in front o...
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...in front of computer screen. Overall, it is clear that at the age of 16-20 bot...
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...aximum time in front of computer screen while least time was consumed by age group of 51+.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, well, whereas, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 214.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46261682243 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27968428367 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415887850467 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 276.3 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9639376123 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.111111111 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315039043283 0.215688989381 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165486928673 0.103423049105 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756870516532 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216671014711 0.15604864568 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028113230519 0.0819641961636 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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