The table gives information about the average hours spent per week in front of the computer for Internet surfing playing games for business purposes by people of different age groups in China

Essay topics:

The table gives information about the average hours spent per week in front of the computer (for Internet surfing, playing games, for business purposes) by people of different age groups in China.

The stipulated tabular chart demonstrates information about mean time in hours disbursed by Chinese of different age groups on computer screens for discrete motives such as surfing on internet, playing games and commercial purposes.

Overall, the key points to note all that teenagers of both sexes splurged most of time on computers and laptops which is an anxious issue while elders were least captivated in internet.

Apropos to the detail of the given chart, that boys having age 10 to 15 years expent about 10 hours however girls of this age devoted two hours less than boys. Moreover, youngsters were addicted to these gadgets. Therefore, they spent maximum hours 24 by men and 23 by women. Apart from this, people of ages 21 to 25 spent medium hours 12 by males and 10 by females per week.

Moving to the further detail of the chart, that senior citizens had least interest in computers. So, time disbursement was collectively 15 hours by both genders. Furthermore, females of middle age and women's of 26- 30 squandered equal amount nine, nine hours whereas males of these groups spent 8 and 9 hours every week respectively.

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Average: 6.8 (18 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, apart from, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 949.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94270833333 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59832156528 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677083333333 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9881591422 43.030603864 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.444444444 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 5.23603664747 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269797778681 0.215688989381 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925531437454 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849691463859 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149754432425 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846764969457 0.0819641961636 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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