task 1 the table below gives information on participation in various leisure activities

Essay topics: task 1 the table below gives information on participation in various leisure activities

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The given table depicts the percentages of people taking part in 8 different categories of leisure activities, in three selected age brackets. Overall, as is self_evidant, that figures for the most popular activities are fairly similar across the age groups. However, there are considerable differences when we look at minority interests.

Having examined the data, we can obviously realized that in three selected age groups, the proportion of people who spend time on recreation like watching TV or video, visiting acquaintances and listening to acoustic devices, have the highest popularity over 93 per cent, expect in oldest group that has a declining ratio to 65 and 83 per cent.

Besides, the rate of people, interested in reading books, do_it_ yourself, gardening and sewing climb by increasing age. this can be illustrated by comparing the 60-65 group with the 16-19 group. 27 per cent of the oldest people are interested in knitting and needlework, the youngest group, in contrast, have the lowest attending to sewing. Although the results for the 25-29 group in the cases cited above are quite different, this group does not obey any formulation.

In general, it can be perceived that most of the people are interested in things, that have few physical activities to do in their leisure time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Overall
...es, in three selected age brackets. overall, as is self_evidant , that figures for...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rackets. overall, as is self_evidant , that figures for the most popular acti...
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Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ckets. overall, as is self_evidant , that figures for the most popular activi...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Having
... we look at the minority interests. having examined the data, we can obviously rea...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'realize'
Suggestion: realize
...ing examined the data, we can obviously realized that in three selected age groups, the ...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the oldest'.
Suggestion: in the oldest
...hest popularity over 93 percent, expect in oldest group that has a declining ratio to 65 ...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ng and sewing climbs by increasing age. this can be illustrated by comparing the 60-...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the oldest'.
Suggestion: of the oldest
...0-65 group with 16-19 group. 27 percent of oldest people are interested in knitting and n...
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Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the lowest'.
Suggestion: have the lowest
...ework, the youngest group, in contrast, have lowest attending to sewing. Although, the resu...
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Line 9, column 144, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...l activities to do in their leisure time .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, in addition, in contrast, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1103.0 965.302439024 114% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30288461538 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86230089961 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.673076923077 0.547539520022 123% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3711081563 43.030603864 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.555555556 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0571882576897 0.215688989381 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263281250575 0.103423049105 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391910959786 0.0843802449381 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0450599140594 0.15604864568 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042194459866 0.0819641961636 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 40.7170731707 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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