The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate some changes to a small island which has been developed for tourism. It is clear that the island has changed considerably with introduction of tourism, and six new features can be seen in the second diagram.

At the second map, there is a reception building that have been built in the middle of the island. It lies between some small huts and there are all nine huts where visitors can stay when they live in the island. The north of the reception is the restaurant that provide food and drink for visitors.

Beside that, the new facilities have been built on the island such as pier where boats can dock. There is also a short road linking the pier with the reception and restaurant, and footpaths connect the huts with the beach where visitors can swim and sunbathe

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...res can be seen in the second diagram. At the second map, there is a reception ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t provide food and drink for visitors. Beside that, the new facilities have bee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, second, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 14.0 33.7804878049 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 662.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 141.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69503546099 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.44591672665 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34527758385 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 192.6 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.6515106768 43.030603864 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.5714285714 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0987685212533 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486401470004 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285645344432 0.0843802449381 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688846935437 0.15604864568 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175705457777 0.0819641961636 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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