The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The pie charts given below illustrate the two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in Canada in 2005 and 2010. The data present in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that the biggest percentage was Electronics and Appliance which got the smallest percentage was Home Furnishings.

In the one hand in 2005 Electronics and Appliance got 35% which was the biggest catagory, followed by Home Furnishing which got 25% which was the biggest second and followed by Food and Beverage which got 22% while which got the smallest was Vidio Game whit percentage 18%.

On the other hand in 2010 for electronics and Appliance experience decrease significantly with degree percentage 10% and which experience increase significant was Food and Beverage namely the biggest 20% followed by Vidio Games which got 5%.

From the two pie charts can be accepted, which got precentage the biggest was Electronics and Appliance in 2005 was 35% but in 2010 degree the percentage experience decrease 5% and in 2010, which experience increase percentage with significantly was Food and Beverage namely the biggest 20%

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he percentage experience decrease 5% and in 2010, which experience increase perce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1693989071 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76692735858 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415300546448 0.547539520022 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 276.3 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5162402103 43.030603864 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.666666667 112.824112599 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 22.9334400587 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222134954745 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178331325965 0.103423049105 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.31484678827 0.0843802449381 373% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182208101864 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.207377951973 0.0819641961636 253% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.2329268293 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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