The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given pie charts represent the percentage of male and female in terms of occupation in Great Britain in 1992.

Overall, Management and professional and other manual jobs were preferred by both sexes. However, females also preferred clerical or relaxed jobs but males were more interested in occupations like craft or similar.

It is evident that, males dominated managerial and professional jobs accounting 36% whereas it was 29% in case of females. Other manual jobs were preferred by both genders almost equally as it was 27% for females whereas 26% for males. However, females were more interested in doing jobs like clerical or related, as it was 31% and had a proportion of mere 6% in case of males.

On the other hand, 24% of the males preferred to do jobs like crafts or similar but it was just 3% in case of females. Other non-manual jobs were preferred by just 9% of females and 6% of males. General labour job had least proportion among both genders.

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Average: 1.1 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...s were preferred by both genders almost equally as it was 27% for females whereas 26% for ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 215, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'had the least'.
Suggestion: had the least
...les and 6% of males. General labour job had least proportion among both genders.
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, whereas, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 807.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83233532934 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62007354845 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520958083832 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8660609598 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.6666666667 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0325398471095 0.215688989381 15% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0211622144164 0.103423049105 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598557812751 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.047614982437 0.15604864568 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824715687824 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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