Writing task 1 IELTS

Essay topics:

Writing task 1 IELTS

The supplied bar chart presented the data on turns of different merchandises in pounds in the United Kingdom during four seasons in 2015.

It can be seen that while the number of returns from clothing dominated the chart during the survey period. Meanwhile, while the figure for returns from household and garden decreased relatively, others experienced an opposite trend.

In the spring, the amount of turns from clothing ranked first in the chart with 100.000 pound, followed by that of household with 80.000 pound. The next position belongs to the figure for electrical equipment standing at the middle of the chart with 60.000 pound, 20.000 pound higher than that of a garden with 40.000 pound. Simultaneously, the data of children’s toys bottomed the chart with roughly 20.000 pound - 40.000 pound.

After four seasons, although the clothing’s returns witnessed an ups and downs trend, it still remained its highest position in the list with 120.000 pounds. Meanwhile, the figure for electrical equipment’s turns inclined significantly by 20.000 pound to 80.000 pound. The same trend was true with the figure for children’s toys with 60.000 pound, surpassed that of households which experienced a considerable reduction from 80.000 pound to 50.000 pound. In addition, a slightly decrease was recorded in the data of gardens, standing at the lowest situation in the chart with 20.000 pound.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Kingdom during four seasons in 2015. It can be seen that while the number of ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... others experienced an opposite trend. In the spring, the amount of turns from ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h roughly 20.000 pound - 40.000 pound. After four seasons, although the clothin...
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Line 7, column 469, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
...000 pound to 50.000 pound. In addition, a slightly decrease was recorded in the data of gardens, st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, still, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1191.0 965.302439024 123% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36486486486 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72240523752 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509009009009 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 306.0 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.3276416838 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.1 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.23603664747 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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