You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day However you think it needs some improvements Write a letter to the college magazine In your letter explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improv

Essay topics:

You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day.. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter:

explain what you like about the cafeteria
say what is wrong with it
suggest how it could be improved

Dear Sir / Madam

I am writing in connection with our college cafeteria. Since almost every student spends some time here every day, I believe it is in everyone's best interest to find ways to improve the quality of this central eatery.

The cafeteria itself is modern, spacious and attractive. The newly painted murals of the seaside give the seating area an open, airy, outdoor feeling which makes it very pleasant to eat meals there. This is further enhanced by the large green plants and flowing water fountains.

The main problem with the cafeteria is in the food served! First of all, there is a very limited selection available. Each day offers up only standard North American fare of hamburgers, hot dogs, chicken nuggets and french fries. Not only is this selection unhealthy, but also uninteresting day in and day out. We have so many international students on campus, it would be wonderful to have some curries, burritos and falafel added to the menu. Secondly, since this is a student cafeteria, prices need to stay low. We have unfortunately seen two price hikes in the last two years.

I am sure if we offer a wider range of foods, at better prices, the cafeteria will continue to run profitably as more students choose to eat there.

Yours faithfully,

Daniel Bernard

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'everyones the best'.
Suggestion: everyones the best
...time here every day, I believe it is in everyones best interest to find ways to improve the qu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1080.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93150684932 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57893565079 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 106.607317073 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.703196347032 0.547539520022 128% => OK
syllable_count: 338.4 283.868780488 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2532823359 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0769230769 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8461538462 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30769230769 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174434096347 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055068715262 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417281915568 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967152486291 0.15604864568 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575019365098 0.0819641961636 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 40.7170731707 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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