You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban rural and town between 1995 and 2010 Summarise the informat

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

The given bar chart illustrates how the proportions of Australian people and those who were born in other countries changed in terms of living areas in a 15-year interval, from 1995 to 2010.

Overall, cities were the most popular option for residents regardless of their origin. It is also worth pointing out that the percentage of people living in the countryside witnessed a dramatic drop in the same period.

To begin with, in 1995, it is recorded that the percentage of Australian citizens in urban areas was around 50%, followed by that of rural area counterparts with the figure standing at 30%. In addition, only approximately 20% of Australian-born residents chose to live in towns. However, in the next 15 years, while the proportion of those in cities experienced a rise, reaching nearly 65%, both percentages of individuals living in the other areas fell slightly and reached a point at around 15% equally.

Turning to the other set of data, within the given period of time, the ratio of non-Australian residents dwelling in cities underwent a surge of about 20%, occupying the largest part of the chart. By contrast, that of these people in rural areas showed a significant fall, reaching the lowest point at just about 5%. Furthermore, there were only 10% of residents from other nations who preferred to live in towns. After 15 years, this figure witnessed no changes.

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Average: 7.9 (4 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 52, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...the other set of data, within the given period of time, the ratio of non-Australian residents ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 33.7804878049 154% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 232.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00862068966 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80192306986 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 106.607317073 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577586206897 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3045291251 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.2 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.23603664747 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219100527533 0.215688989381 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856314227681 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572346529852 0.0843802449381 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14287847574 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599783188138 0.0819641961636 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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The two given bar charts give information about the proportion of citizens born insde and outside Australia and living in cities, towns and rural areas in two years 1995 and 2010.

Overall, it is clear that the percentage of people living in urban areas accounted for the largest proportion in two years. In addition, there was a significant drop in the number of citizen living in rural areas.

In 1995, living in cities was the most popular trend with people born outside and inside Australia (50% and 60% of the total number Australian citizens, respectively). The second trend was living rural with aproximately 30% for people born in Australia and 40 for people born ouside Australia. The third popular trend was living in towns with only 20% for citizens born in Australia and 10% for the figure for ouside Australia.

In 2010, there was a urbanization in Australia. Australia witnessed the sharp decrease in the citizens living in rural areas and the significant jump in that figure for living in cities. Also, the citizens living towns also experienced drop.