18/10/2017 A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
• give contact details for when you are away
• give instructions about how to care for your pet
• describe other household duties
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear John,
To begin with, I want to thank you for your consent to look after my house and dog. Your help is indispensable and without it, I would not be able to have any vacation in a foreseen future. I leave the city on 29th March and return on 15th April. I am going to spend the first week of my holidays on sightseeing Sochi and then I plan to visit beaches of Cremia. My cell-phone will be “on” all the time and you can call me freely at any time. If you are not able to contact me by phone, write an email. The telephone numbers of my hotels, I will send you by SMS as soon as I book rooms.
I know you have a plethora of experience with pets but my dog has quite a difficult character. Feeding is the biggest problem if it doesn't want to eat, just ignore it: when the dog is hungry, it will eat whatever you put on its plate. Mike should be taken on a walk at least twice a day to make pee and poo outside the house. All needed equipment to clean after the dog is placed near the entrance.
There are some basic rules concerned living in my house. Firstly, plants ought to be watered thrice a week. Secondly, the lawn should be cut once a week. And finally, my payment to the landlady is planed on 5th April, your duty is to hand her the cash and ask her to count the money in front of you. Otherwise, she may claim you gave her only a half.
Once again, thank you for your help.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
I leave the city on 29th March
I will leave the city on 29th March
I am going to spend the first week of my holidays on sightseeing Sochi
I am going to spend the first week of my holidays in sightseeing Sochi
The telephone numbers of my hotels, I will send you by SMS as soon as I book rooms.
I will send you The telephone numbers of my hotels by SMS as soon as I book rooms.
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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
some changes:
but my dog has quite a difficult character.
but my dog Mike has quite a difficult character. //need to introduce Mike here
There are some basic rules concerned living in my house.
There are some basic duties concerned living in my house. //since the topic is 'describe other household duties' not 'rules'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 283 250
No. of Characters: 1102 1200
No. of Different Words: 171 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 3.894 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.072 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 49 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 20 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 12 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.039 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Dear Sir,
Dear Sir,
I would like to discuss my grammatical mistakes.
1) I leave the city on 29th March because it is scheduled. I implied that tickets have been purchased.
can I do it?
2)I am going to spend the first week of my holidays on sightseeing Sochi. (Spend on is a collocation. Usage of "in" appears to be a mistake.)
Thank you.
1) I leave the city on 29th
1) I leave the city on 29th March because it is scheduled. I implied that tickets have been purchased.
can I do it?
A: no, it is for future.
2)I am going to spend the first week of my holidays on sightseeing Sochi. (Spend on is a collocation. Usage of "in" appears to be a mistake.)
A: Sochi is a city, so it is 'in'
if the location is small, we use 'at':
Tommy spends most of his time in class staring out of the window.
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spend time/money on something, for example:
Political parties spend millions on their campaigns.
The school spent its annual budget on computers and technology.
My daughter spends too much time on her homework; she should go out more often.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...r. Feeding is the biggest problem if it doesnt want to eat, just ignore it: when the d...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...k you for your help. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, at least, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1173.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 282.0 206.0 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.15957446809 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24376192634 2.54303337028 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 127.690721649 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617021276596 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 290.88556701 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 12.6804123711 142% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0737960813 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.1666666667 76.5299724578 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189863551152 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562490556977 0.0766984524023 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739644878295 0.0603063233224 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136629576447 0.12726935374 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720682632762 0.0580467560999 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 8.37731958763 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.55 8.71597938144 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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