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04.10.2017Your colleague from a different town is coming next month and you are moving out of your current accommodation. Write a letter to the colleague to recommend they move into your house and say– Why are you moving to another house?– Describe yo

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Your colleague from a different town is coming next month and you are moving out of your current accommodation. Write a letter to the colleague to recommend they move into your house and say
– Why are you moving to another house?
– Describe your present accommodation.
– Explain why it will suit your colleague.

EugeneDubinchuk's picture

Dear John,
I am writing to give you a piece of advice.

I heard from our colleagues you are being transferred to Dallas next month. This is great news. I want to help you with finding a place to live in my home city. In fact, I am moving out at the end of the next week and my apartment will be available for rent. If you want, I could talk to my landlord to reserve it for you.

There is some news that I would like to share with you. The biggest one is I have just got married to the prettiest woman in the world and we decided to start our marital life in a new house. So, we are going to take a mortgage on a newly built two-story house that is situated on the outskirts of the megalopolis in a peaceful, calm neighborhood. In fact, the credit has been approved and we are going to move in.

Anyway, the flat I used to live is located in a spectacular place. There is a riverside that is well-maintain and a big beautiful park. Moreover, there are two cinema theaters, three nice restaurants, a gym and a big department store. In other words, all needed infrastructure and services are conveniently located nearby.
Furthermore, the landlord is a decent, old woman who will not cause you any troubles and the rent is reasonable. In average, apartments in this neighborhood cost about eight hundred dollars per month but the lady charges only five hundred.

If you like my idea, I will talk to the landlord as soon as I get your consent.

I wait for your prompt response.

Sincerely yours,

Eugene.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, in fact, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.48453608247 227% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1249.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 281.0 206.0 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44483985765 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65502369982 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 127.690721649 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601423487544 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 290.88556701 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 12.6804123711 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2095429019 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.7368421053 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7894736842 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84210526316 4.34317383033 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196594318663 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502622146566 0.0766984524023 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524742055176 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834043278462 0.12726935374 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552812152677 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 8.37731958763 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.88 8.71597938144 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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flaws:
this paragraph is extra:

I heard from our colleagues you are being transferred to Dallas next month. This is great news. I want to help you with finding a place to live in my home city. In fact, I am moving out at the end of the next week and my apartment will be available for rent. If you want, I could talk to my landlord to reserve it for you.

one sentence enough:
...since you are from a different town and coming next month...

the three requirements don't need this paragraph:
– Why are you moving to another house?
– Describe your present accommodation.
– Explain why it will suit your colleague.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 281 250
No. of Characters: 1178 1200
No. of Different Words: 163 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.094 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.192 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 49 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.173 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.159 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5

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