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01/11/2017 Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back

Essay topics: 01/11/2017
Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter
– give details about your flight
– describe the item you forgot
– explain why it is important that you get it back

EugeneDubinchuk's picture

Dear Sir or Madame,

I am a loyal client of your airline for almost ten years by now and I am writing to ask you about a favor. On 29th October 2017, I flew from Moscow to New York by Airbus A320, flight number NG40R10 in the first class. My seat number was A10.

With me, I had a workstation Lenovo W540p with a 4K display. Unfortunately, the airplane landed with an hour delay because of the inclement weather conditions. In a hurry, I forgot my laptop in the cabin. The computer is black and has a sticker on the surface that states: “this machine kills fascists”. The workstation was put in a big red with white straps case. The case is really colorful, I think you will identify it quickly.

I would like to get my equipment back because the retail price of such a laptop is about three and a half thousand dollars. Moreover, some sensitive data is stored on a hard drive of the computer. There is not only information about the project on which I work but also many personal data such as photographs and videos that are valuable for me and that do not have copies. I hope that you can help me to solve this problem.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely yours,

Eugene Dubinchuk

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madame, I am a loyal client of your airline for ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ut in a big red with white straps case. The case is really colorful, I think you wi...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 223.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5067264574 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57188864313 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663677130045 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 303.3 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4532668596 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.0 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8666666667 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174574702331 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446145289034 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503950811456 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791308189228 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520391940323 0.0580467560999 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 8.37731958763 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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With me, I had a workstation Lenovo W540p with a 4K display.
descriptions: two 'with' in one sentence

The workstation was put in a big red with white straps case.
The workstation was put in a big red case with white straps.

There is not only information about the project on which I work but also many personal data such as photographs and videos
There are not only information about the project on which I work but also many personal data such as photographs and videos

that are valuable for me and that do not have copies.
descriptions: two 'that' in one sentence

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 223 250
No. of Characters: 943 1200
No. of Different Words: 149 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.864 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.229 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.35 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.267 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.235 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.279 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5

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