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01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back

Essay topics: 01/11/2017
Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter
– give details about your flight
– describe the item you forgot
– explain why it is important that you get it back

EugeneDubinchuk's picture

Dear Sir or Madame,

I am a loyal client of your airline for almost ten years by now and I am writing to ask you about a favor. On 29th October 2017, I flew from Moscow to New York by Airbus A320, flight number NG40R10 in the first class. My seat number was A10.

On this flight with me, I had a workstation Lenovo W540p with a 4K display. I was using it while I was flying. Unfortunately, I forgot my laptop in the cabin. The computer is black and has a sticker on the surface that states: “this machine kills fascists”. The workstation should be in a big read with white straps case that I used while traveling. So, I think you will identify it quickly.

I want you to return this piece of equipment because the retail price of such a laptop is about three and a half thousand dollars. Moreover, some sensitive data is stored in a hard drive of the computer that should not be lost or get into wrong hands. I hope that you can help me with this problem.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely yours,

Eugene Dubinchuk.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madame, I am a loyal client of your airline for ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, while, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 867.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42346938776 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51568900509 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647959183673 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3549480617 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.9285714286 76.5299724578 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165493314916 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466518292185 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050320408143 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775639781485 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456210996738 0.0580467560999 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 8.37731958763 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 70.7449484536 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 7.59969072165 92% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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On this flight with me,
On this flight,

The workstation should be in a big read with white straps case
The workstation should be in a big red case with white straps

flaws:
this essay is not outstanding, look:
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 196 250
No. of Characters: 806 1200
No. of Different Words: 128 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.742 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.112 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.26 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 51 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 28 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 15 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.758 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.312 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.644 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5

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