18/10/2017 A recent study showed that both developing and developed countries prosper because of the economic growth. People from developing countries are happier than before while people from developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past.

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18/10/2017 A recent study showed that both developing and developed countries prosper because of the economic growth. People from developing countries are happier than before while people from developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this happening? How can this situation be improved? Give your opinion including relevant examples and your own experience

The economy is steadily growing in many countries across the globe; however, citizens of wealthy states appear to be happier today than in the past while inhabitants of the third-world countries claim they are less satisfied with their lives nowadays than before. Below some possible reasons for this trend will be discussed and plausible solutions will be given.

Primarily, economic growth brings different fruits to the developed and developing states. To illustrate, for those who dwell in such countries as the United Kingdom, Germany, France, the United States of America, the growth means already high standards of living, social services and benefits will keep increasing consistently. At the same time, folks that live in poor countries will likely remain poor because finances generated by the growing economy are spread unevenly. In the worst case scenario, the money may be accumulated in hands of a small group of powerful individuals and an average individual will not feel any positive alteration at all. Consequently, people’s perception of happiness differs from state to state.

However, the trend in discussion may be alleviated. Firstly, unwealthy governments must invest heavily in the mass media that can become an efficient tool of propaganda. Telling people repeatedly about the achieved success and demonstrating happy examples of lucky people who manage to make a fortune will likely create an optimistic attitude to life among dwellers. So, this hope and enthusiasm will have an advantageous impact on their happiness. Secondly, business people and politicians of well-off states could invest finances in economies of developing ones. Financing construction of roads, subways and medical institutions would skyrocket the quality of living of all citizens of the poor states. Thus, their happiness would probably rocket. Those are several possible actions to be taken to tackle to issue.

In my opinion, economic growth does not always mean prosperity for all citizens, but the problematic situation may be improved tremendously if developing states work with public’s opinions and rich ones invest resources in third-world economies in a meaningful way.

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Average: 4.3 (3 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 251, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a meaningful way" with adverb for "meaningful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...vest resources in third-world economies in a meaningful way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thus, well, while, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57313432836 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88972492391 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632835820896 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0611532414 49.4020404114 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6875 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219742492673 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633159368387 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760083444925 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125606020963 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429009877629 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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flaws:
It is out of topic. read the topic again.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 335 350
No. of Characters: 1807 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.278 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.394 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.77 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.228 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.47 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.019 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

A recent study showed that both developing and developed countries prosper because of the economic growth. People from developing countries are happier than before while people from developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past. Why is this happening? How can this situation be improved? Give your opinion including relevant examples and your own experience

My analysis:

the first para Why is this happening? - why are People from developing countries happier than before while people from developed countries are not as happy as they were in the past?

the second para: How can this situation be improved? - how may the situation with happiness in developing countries be improved?

Finally, my opinion.
where did I make a mistake.
Thank you!