26.09.2017 In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are you opinions on this?
Engaging youngsters in paid work is a widespread practice in many states. Some claim that it is unacceptable while others see the practice as an efficient way to pass down important experience. Below both prospects will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated.
On the one hand, being engaging in work could have an adverse effect on offspring. Firstly, a decline in academic achievement of a working child may be seen as the first problem. Usually the jobs that are given to young people require working before or after school; consequently, young employees have to spend time that ought to be devoted to studying on fulfilling their duties at a workplace. Secondly, working could have an unfavorable impact on offspring health. For example, a kid who delivers newspapers should wake up early and it leads to a lack of sleep that may weaken a fragile immune system of the child, moreover, he must do the job even when weather is inclement and it is raining or snowing; thus, delivering press in those conditions will likely have a disadvantageous influence on the boy’s organism. Those are the main drawback of the discussed policy.
On the other hand, working may provide a young person with indispensable opportunity to get beneficial experience. Primarily, a feeling of responsibility is forged at a workplace. For an instance, when a pupil is given an assignment he will not get paid till the quality of work is checked. This simple experience will inevitably give a child an understanding of the concept of responsibility. Furthermore, experiencing being paid a relatively small amount of money for a done job and seeing that more qualified employees are paid higher wages will probably motivate a boy to study harder at school in order to improve job prospects after graduation. Thus, engaging in a work has an auspicious impact on personality of kids and their attitude to acquiring knowledge.
In my opinion, although the practice has many positive aspects, the negative ones outweigh them because the physical well-being of a student as well as his school performance is fundamental for achieving a successful future.
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Essay evaluation report
Those are the main drawback of the discussed policy.
Those are the main drawbacks of the discussed policy.
because the physical well-being of a student as well as his school performance is fundamental for achieving a successful future.
because the physical well-being of a student as well as his school performance are fundamental for achieving a successful future. //as well as == and
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1757 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.949 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.935 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.188 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.299 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10985915493 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06697053657 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.5940551986 49.4020404114 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.375 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186873589398 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648105446688 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478497090006 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11423493539 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526316551841 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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