Some people think that sport teaches children how to compete, while others believe that children learn team work.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some aver that sport develops in our progeny a desire to compete. At the same time, there are those who state that our offspring are taught how to be team players. Below both prospects will be discussed in details and author’s opinion will be stated.
To begin with, for many people sport is embodiment of competition. In fact, almost all sports events are aimed to figure out who is the fastest, the strongest or the best at a particular activity. To illustrate, success of any country that takes part in Olympic Games is measured by a number of trophies and medals its athletes have won. Consequently, youngsters who do sports are faced with a necessity to rival with each other.
However, there is an alternative point of view that those children who participate to athletic activities learn how to work in a team. Of course, there are some games such as football and baseball that are played by teams and those young people who play them are perhaps have to learn how to work together. Moreover, taking closer look at any sport would reveal that there is always a place for some team work. For instance, even such a highly individualistic activity as running assumes that the athletes exercise with other sportsmen and work with a coach. Thus, any sports person acquires knows how to be a team player.
Finally, it seems that any sport, by default, requires from the participants have a desire to compete and a skill of working in a team. Of course, different games demand a distinct proportion of both elements. For instance, box requires from the fighters to be more competitive while playing basketball call in for more team effort and less rivalry with each other.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
This is not like a conclusion paragraph:
Finally, it seems that any sport, by default, requires from the participants have a desire to compete and a skill of working in a team. Of course, different games demand a distinct proportion of both elements. For instance, box requires from the fighters to be more competitive while playing basketball call in for more team effort and less rivalry with each other.
it should be something like:
In my opinion....
and it should not have examples in the conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 291 350
No. of Characters: 1348 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.13 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.632 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.485 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.537 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 570, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...rtsmen and work with a coach. Thus, any sports person acquires knows how to be a team ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in fact, of course, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80412371134 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6161519024 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556701030928 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6884546916 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276969788902 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879034073691 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561698621542 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149866569716 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07422008001 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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