23.10.2017 You have a pen-friend living in another country and he/she is curious to learn about the major news items in your country.
Write a letter to your pen-friend. In your letter:
• Greet your friend and say why you are writing.
• Briefly describe a news story in your country
• Explain why people are interested in it.
Dear John,
I am writing to continue our conversation about our countries. You have asked me to share with you some pieces of news that I consider to be interesting. So, below I present you the most interesting and important news that has happened in the motherland.
To begin with, Russian Federation has significantly increased its expenditures on the development of military technology. The biggest part of the finances is being spent on modernization of existing armed vehicles and creation of novel tanks and intercontinental ballistic missiles or ICBMs with multiple warheads. Reforming the system of the school education is another item of major news. Although the Soviet Union seized its existence more than twenty-five years ago, the way children are taught at school has no been properly reorganized. So, this reform is aimed at designing a curriculum that will satisfy the requirements of tomorrow’s society.
Those news stories are so crucial because they will impact lives of millions of citizens. To illustrate, investing money in the military hardware will speed up state’s economy because this kind of work may be fulfilled only inside the borders. So, the money will be poured into the local economy and about one-third of the total population will explicitly or implicitly benefit from it. The Infamous school reform is so important because about 98 percent of Russian families have progeny and all mothers, fathers and grandparents want their offspring have the best life possible and the majority of them thinks the implementation of the proposed program could destroy the future of the young people.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk
Comments
Essay evaluation report
has no been properly reorganized
has not been properly reorganized
flaws:
It is not right on the topic. the topic is: 'Briefly describe a news story in your country', while there are two news items.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 264 250
No. of Characters: 1367 1200
No. of Different Words: 173 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.031 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.178 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.879 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.932 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Two news items:
Two news items:
increased its expenditures on the development of military technology. and
Reforming the system of the school education
The first bullet point is fine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 514, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...e way children are taught at school has no been properly reorganized. So, this ref...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, third, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 937.175257732 152% => OK
No of words: 264.0 206.0 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37878787879 4.54256449028 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99554880985 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 127.690721649 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655303030303 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 290.88556701 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5471314938 44.8134815571 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.230769231 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 16.8248392259 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 4.34317383033 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0823636038263 0.216113520407 38% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315268226832 0.0766984524023 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040110139173 0.0603063233224 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629890161023 0.12726935374 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380328501735 0.0580467560999 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 8.37731958763 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 70.7449484536 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 8.71597938144 160% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 7.59969072165 129% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 41.2886597938 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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