Although you have never formally studied computing. You have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.Write a letter to the

Essay topics:

Although you have never formally studied computing. You have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course.
Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter
-Explain why you are writing
-Describe your circumstances
Ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course.

Dear sir,
I am Harry Martin, senior sales manager in city bank, Greenwich branch. This morning, I read about the new animation course offered by your college. I am writing you regarding the admission in same.

Actually, I am a computer savvy since childhood but I had interest in marketing too so I pursued MBA from Oxford University. Although, I do not have any formal certification in computing but in my free time I always learn the computer tips and tricks from YouTube channel. Also my brother is a computer graduate so he has also made me learn many softwares such as MS WORD, MS power point, Photoshop etc .

This six month course in animation offered by your college has risen my wish to learn computer professionally. this course would definitely help me to make attractive presentations in future to attract more customers. With due respect, I wanted to ask you could guide me that if by any sort, I could join this course leaving the compulsion of elementary course.<span style="font-size: 14.5pt; line-height: 107%; font-family: &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;"> I would be really grateful to you.For any </span><span class="hiddenspellerror"><span pre="any " style="cursor: default;">query</span></span> or further information <span class="hiddensuggestion"><span pre="information " style="cursor: default;">about</span> my educational or career details, you could
contact me at 401-401-4011 or email me at harry.sandhu@abc.com</span>

I hope to get a positive revert from you soon.

<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size: 14.5pt; line-height: 107%; font-family: &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">Yours Faithfully,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size: 14.5pt; line-height: 107%; font-family: &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; background-image: initial; background-position: initial; background-size: initial; background-repeat: initial; background-attachment: initial; background-origin: initial; background-clip: initial;">Harry Martin</span><o:p></o:p></p>

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir, I am Harry Martin, senior sales manager ...
^^^
Line 4, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...r tips and tricks from YouTube channel. Also my brother is a computer graduate so he...
^^^^
Line 4, column 403, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s MS WORD, MS power point, Photoshop etc . This six month course in animation o...
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Line 6, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... wish to learn computer professionally. this course would definitely help me to make...
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Line 6, column 714, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...pos;> I would be really grateful to you.For any ^^^
Line 13, column 365, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...nd-clip: initial;'>Yours Faithfully,

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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...;>Harry Martin

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, really, regarding, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 937.175257732 243% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 293.0 206.0 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.77815699659 4.54256449028 171% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 6.84942893642 2.54303337028 269% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 172.0 127.690721649 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587030716724 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 290.88556701 212% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.1 1.41237113402 149% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 16.3608247423 177% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 305.249733825 44.8134815571 681% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 227.9 76.5299724578 298% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 29.3 16.8248392259 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0801348571361 0.216113520407 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535597355306 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502326049182 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0647596293786 0.12726935374 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482859965595 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.9 8.37731958763 357% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -0.26 70.7449484536 -0% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 3.82989690722 415% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 7.45979381443 275% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 28.44 8.71597938144 326% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 7.59969072165 124% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 41.2886597938 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 8.54432989691 159% => OK
text_standard: 30.0 8.15463917526 368% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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