Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of society. Do you think art and music still have a place in today’s modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?
- Write at least 250 words.
- You should spend around 40 minutes on this task.
Some people regard the arts as fundamental pillars of society, and even in today’s technology-dominated world, art and music are still important. More than ever before, I believe it is necessary to teach children such subjects in school for the many benefits they bring society.
Art and music are central to life in developed civilizations. For a start, they help society to reflect on what it has become. As society advances, artists help to interpret the changes and problems created by progress in unique ways. Artists use their creativity to draw attention to key issues such as the increasing mountains of trash produced or the rich-poor divide. Secondly, artists make people more humble by helping them remember their humanity and their connections to the world around them. Pictures of nature, society, tribal scenes, past and present make people think about their roots and consider where they’re heading. Finally, music gives joy and inspiration to many people. It helps to express emotion and lift mood when feeling down.
While in school, there are key advantages to learning art and music. For one, both give children the creativity to express themselves. Children live in a world of adults; however, art and music classes allow all to be themselves which is good for their mental development. For example, while older children are less inclined, younger children often find singing, dancing and painting to be among their favorite classes. In turn, studying music has proven beneficial in helping children connect more with their emotions. This produces more rounded adults able to connect with their knowledge through science and their emotions through art and music.
In conclusion, for adults and children, the arts bring not only joy, but inspiration, and helps both to remember who they are really are in a world dominated by science.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...motion and lift mood when feeling down. While in school, there are key advantage...
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Suggestion: been
...ps both to remember who they are really are in a world dominated by science.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 5.05154639175 356% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 26.3917525773 163% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 937.175257732 167% => OK
No of words: 300.0 206.0 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.78020617076 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67264953848 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 127.690721649 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593333333333 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 290.88556701 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8524599753 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9411764706 76.5299724578 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 4.34317383033 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 7.41237113402 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261113790248 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953212109758 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958762387091 0.0603063233224 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170390843563 0.12726935374 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739801087907 0.0580467560999 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 8.71597938144 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 41.2886597938 199% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.