Dear Sir/Madam,I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper.I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter informing that I won the first prize for the contest held to discover new writers last month. M

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper.

I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter informing that I won the first prize for the contest held to discover new writers last month. My article was chosen and posted in the science section of the volume published on May 25th.

My prize was 2 million Vietnam dongs along with a contract to work at your newspaper as a part-time writers. It was also mentioned that I would be given a 3-month training course at Literature and Society university with professionals from Singapore. As for the money, it was supposed to be transferred to my bank account 2 weeks ago.

As I have not received any further instruction to claim my prize so far, I would be grateful if you could take a look at this situation. I really need this money to pay my bills because I am still a college student and I am living in a budget. Therefore, if you could, please transfer this money to my bank account soon. I can still wait for the contract and training course.

I look forward to hearing from you
Yours faithfully,
Truong Nguyen

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to a prize for amateur writers at Thanh Nien newspaper.

I received a call from the newspaper’s headquarter last month informing that I won the first prize for the writing contest. my submission was chosen and posted in the science section of the volume published on May 25th.

my prize was 2 million Vietnam dongs along with a contract to work at your newspaper as a part-time writer. it was also mentioned that I would be given a 3-month training course at Literature and Society university with professional writers from Singapore. As for the money, it was supposed to be transferred to my bank account 2 weeks ago.

As I have not received any further information to claim my prize so far, I would be grateful if you could take a look at this situation. I really need this money to pay my bills because I am still a college student and I am living in a budget. Therefore, if you could, please transfer this money to my bank account soon. I can still wait for the contract and the training course.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Truong Nguyen

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, really, so, still, therefore, as for, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 997.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93564356436 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76808824252 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59900990099 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 279.0 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9138629996 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0833333333 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 4.34317383033 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445946900794 0.216113520407 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155043371108 0.0766984524023 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208519562762 0.0603063233224 346% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260446618657 0.12726935374 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.197270040689 0.0580467560999 340% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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