During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
- remind him when and where you met
- tell him what kind of job you are interested in
- say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Mr. Smith,
This is Kayvan Soltani and I am writing this letter to remind you of a conversation we had on Wednesday, 26th June on the flight from Vancouver to Toronto.
If you recall, I changed my seat at the request of a woman who was sitting next to you and wished to sit beside her friend and. Eventually, we started talking about the current job market and you told me about your chain of restaurants and the job vacancies you usually have.
As I mentioned briefly, I used to work as a project manager at a trading company based in Vancouver, Down Town. My responsibilities included a number of routine tasks performed on a daily basis which I found boring and monotonous. Therefore, I decided to leave my job and look for a more challenging position in which I can have more contact with people and work in teams. I am particularly interested in public relations or customer experience management.
I got my bachelor's degree in general management and have completed a course in CRM at Mc Gill college. I am an energetic, sociable person who welcomes any chance to get to know new people. Moreover, I am a great listener with remarkable problem-solving skills which I believe make me an ideal candidate for the above-mentioned positions.
Should you require any more information in this regard, please do not hesitate to contact me.
I look forward to your kind reply.
Yours sincerely,
Kayvan Soltani
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Smith, This is Kayvan Soltani and I am writing ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ted a course in CRM at Mc Gill college. I am an energetic, sociable person who we...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to your kind reply. Yours sincerely, Kayvan Soltani
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, in general, mind you, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1186.0 937.175257732 127% => OK
No of words: 246.0 206.0 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82113821138 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98704984653 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642276422764 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 290.88556701 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.838547749 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2307692308 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9230769231 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 4.34317383033 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199238470643 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596245318844 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740043631411 0.0603063233224 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0999073898376 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088769338808 0.0580467560999 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 41.2886597938 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.