A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this to express my opinion regarding spending a budget on sponsoring the local children's football team or organising two open-air concerts.
On the one hand, sponsoring the local children's football team for two years has several advantages. The field currently used by the team for training is in a poor condition and the grass needs to be replaced, which could improve the children's quality of playing to a great extent. Moreover, we really need to hire an experienced coach if we intend to enter national competitions and as you know a qualified coach can be really expensive to pay for. In addition, the team requires new sets of clothes and shoes in order to be able to play professionally.
On the other hand, paying for two open-air concerts can really boost the mood of people, especially after the recent economic crisis. After struggling so hard for almost a year, people could really use such events. It could also encourage more cultural activities in the region.
Considering the benefits of both above-mentioned option, I personally believe that supporting the local children's sports team can have longer lasting effects and it would definitely be a valuable investment for the future of the team.
I hope I have been able to provide you with enough information to help you make the most beneficial decision for our neighbourhood.
Yours faithfully,
Kayvan Soltani
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this to express my opinion ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our neighbourhood. Yours faithfully, Kayvan Soltani
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, in addition, you know, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1200.0 937.175257732 128% => OK
No of words: 235.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10638297872 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88126273811 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 127.690721649 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642553191489 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 290.88556701 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.9871590945 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.090909091 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 16.8248392259 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 4.34317383033 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289436922654 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102587347745 0.0766984524023 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078017981255 0.0603063233224 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148948319229 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548055721498 0.0580467560999 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 8.37731958763 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 8.71597938144 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.