Finding it hard to remember important facts and figures Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your

Essay topics:

Finding it hard to remember important facts and figures? Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course. Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time.

You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your money. Write a letter to the organisers of the course. In the letter:
- give some background information about yourself
- explain your own problem and why you would like to do the course
- enquire about the methods used on the course
- enquire about course fees and dates.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I have been as an accountant of retail company for 5 years. Because of the job, I have to memorise a lot of information, included: figures, data and documents. A good memory is required if I want to accomplish all the tasks of this position. I could memorise a long list of number easily without any effort a year ago. But now, I find that it is harder and I usually need stickers and applications on my mobile phone and computer to note and remind me what to do next. I read the advertisement about your course and think it may be useful for me.

The methods used on the course is critical. Thus, before register, I would like to be shared about the methods used on the course. I also want to be inform about fees and dates.

I am in full time job and attending an evening language class on Mondays and Wednesdays. I hope you could arrange schedule to suit for me.

Thanks and best regard,

Votes
Average: 7.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...nform about fees and dates. I am in full time job and attending an evening language c...
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Line 7, column 90, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nguage class on Mondays and Wednesdays. I hope you could arrange schedule to suit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 752.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34682080925 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52364937632 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658959537572 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1764690467 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.6666666667 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4166666667 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 4.34317383033 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131680355701 0.216113520407 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434624787716 0.0766984524023 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490617354682 0.0603063233224 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0597672865951 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042425217767 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 8.37731958763 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.36 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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