A friend you made while you studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:tell your friend a

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A friend you made while you studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter:
tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves,
say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her,
explain how to apply for the job

Dear Karen,

I am writing to inform you that I received your letter and thrilled to know that you have completed your post graduation. Additionally, you need my assistance to find a job in my country and the timing couldn't be right as I recently heard about a job opening in Fair-Price which is a local company here in Singapore.

Let me explain in detail. Firstly, since you are interested in supporting local businesses, particularly those in the retail sector, this will be the perfect platform to kick-start your career. Secondly, you will have to work in shifts, but the work mostly involves arranging the items in shelves, disposing off expired items, attending to the needs of the shoppers and cashier duties. Lastly, I think you are a perfect fit for the job because you performed similar responsibilities during your internship.

Therefore, if this sounded interesting you need to send your resume to hr@fairprice.com immediately. Furthermore, connect with them on LinkedIn to increase visibility.

I look forward to your reply and hope you get an offer.

Your friend,
Mary

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...find a job in my country and the timing couldnt be right as I recently heard about a jo...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 923.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 179.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15642458101 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04886700682 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664804469274 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.897980581 44.8134815571 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 4.34317383033 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.458836639115 0.216113520407 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161906899679 0.0766984524023 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104370827008 0.0603063233224 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229020807057 0.12726935374 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897067409044 0.0580467560999 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 8.71597938144 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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