A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to contribute my opinions regarding the sponsor projects from the company.
According to sponsoring the sports team for two years, this is such a great investment in local children. It not only helps children to improve their physical and mental health but also reduces the financial burden for the city.
Regarding the musical concerts, the local citizens can enjoy those events that will reduce stress after a long working day. There was no any concert organized in the public for almost 2 years, so it is a good chance to warm up cultural activities like this.
From my sentiment, I would prefer spending money on the local sports teams because children development is a vital of importance rather than any others. There are different ways that the public can relieve their stress instead of joining the concerts. For example: when the children playing the matches, the public can go to the stadium to enjoy the competitions that also can be a good way to reduce stress.
Finally, I would like to express your kind sponsorship on our city and I wish the company will grow rapidly in the near future.
Best Regards,
Quang Nguyen.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to contribute my opinions r...
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Line 4, column 134, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ess after a long working day. There was no any concert organized in the public for...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...idly in the near future. Best Regards, Quang Nguyen.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, regarding, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 974.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 201.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84577114428 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4777717785 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65671641791 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.8586768791 44.8134815571 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265821098151 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938719676065 0.0766984524023 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861162943804 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127525614892 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845576793948 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 8.71597938144 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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