A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear sir/madam,
I am Harry sandhu, a senior citizen of Greenwich Avenue, living here since 1990. I am writing this letter in connection to choose one out of two events you have planned to organise in our area.
First of all, I thankyou on behalf of all the residents of our area for sponsoring such event and asking our feedback for the same. Both the events weather sports sponsorship for local children or two open-air concerts have their own benefits. The former one will definitely encourage underprivileged youngsters to carry on their passion. Also, under the mentorship of experienced coach, they could polish their talent very well.
Open-air concert would expand the popularity of our area, as such events attracts audience from distant places as well. This will not only a mode of entertainment but also a source of income for the local government. Local people could also earn money by hosting shopping stalls or food stalls and not only that, the local people may get contract for work such as electrician, tent house, or event organisers. Therefore it is a win-win situation for us.
I believe that company should organise two open-air concerts as this event has more benefits in the form of entertainment, income and so on, in contrast to sports sponsorship for children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir/madam, I am Harry sandhu, a senior citizen of G...
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Line 6, column 411, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ician, tent house, or event organisers. Therefore it is a win-win situation for us. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, so, therefore, well, in contrast, such as, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1081.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 216.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00462962963 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72354071748 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634259259259 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.778985027 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2727272727 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 4.34317383033 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280400099731 0.216113520407 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100587194162 0.0766984524023 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811369565236 0.0603063233224 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166018956671 0.12726935374 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635001911915 0.0580467560999 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.