Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible. Write to the director of the school and request these document

Essay topics:

Last year you attended a presentation skill course at the Sydney College of Australia. Your new employer has asked you to provide copies of your reports and assignments as quickly as possible.

Write to the director of the school and request these documents.

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Headteacher,

I am Rahul former participant of personality course held through your prestigious college. I am writing this letter because I have applied for a job and my boss has requested me to send some official papers of the presentation for my credential and educational background information.

Firstly, In my interview they have asked me about my speaking skills experience. Fortunately, I have given my past experience of course token in your college. Moreover, they were quite impressive of my achievements and my hostage in country like a Australia to get performed over there and present my talents and qualities to audience.

Secondly, the proof of my participation as well as certified papers can help me to gain this occupation as a social speaker. Besides, If you can also put some writing for recommendation to this job. As, this can ultimately led me to make this job.

Furthermore, the fast carrier services opted for this work to be appreciated as well as aggregate delivery charges and other expenses will be solely incurred by me. If you want any further information I have enclosed a print copy of my adress

ss, phone number and e-mail id. Also, you can contact me anytime.

I shall look forward to your immediate actions.

Yours faithfully,D

Votes
Average: 7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...equested me to send some official papers of the presentation for my credential an...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and educational background information. Firstly, In my interview they have asked...
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Line 9, column 111, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...xperience. Fortunately, I have given my past experience of course token in your college. Moreov...
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Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...evements and my hostage in country like a Australia to get performed over there a...
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Line 13, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...writing for recommendation to this job. As, this can ultimately led me to make thi...
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Line 13, column 224, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...on to this job. As, this can ultimately led me to make this job. Furthermore,...
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Line 17, column 166, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...expenses will be solely incurred by me. If you want any further information I have...
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Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ss
...ve enclosed a print copy of my adress ss, phone number and e-mail id. Also, you ...
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Line 27, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , D
...immediate actions. Yours faithfully,D
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, of course, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14150943396 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05501283428 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641509433962 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 340.2 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.962730948 44.8134815571 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8333333333 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 4.34317383033 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129887496769 0.216113520407 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592017771482 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412546790546 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0644154138762 0.12726935374 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189322826016 0.0580467560999 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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