A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include
Problems they have now
Suggestions to change
How they could make these changes
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to provide valuable suggestions and ideas for renovating school. I saw an article in the newspaper
where school wants suggestion from local residents to improve infrastructure of the school.
Since I have completed my studies in the same school, in my opinion, the major issue is with the computer system which are outdated.
I still remember while I was a student, there were constant issue with the computer in terms of speed and memory.
In todays technological world, I believe students must taught properly how to use a computer, because I regret the opportunity which has been
missed while I was a student.
Instead of renovating playground and basketball area, which many students would have suggest, I believe, with that money all the computers at the
school can be upgraded. Eventually a new projector should be equipped in the computer room, which will help students for better visuals and they can
also prepare power-point presentation for their projects that are assigned every year.
I also recommend to ask for clarity from Government,by sharing ideas how upgrading computers will help students in their career, which would help
the school all in all to develop the school as a whole.
Please contact me if information is require for the latest computer system and processor.
I am waiting to hearing from you.
Yours Sincerely,
Parth Patel
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 86, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'suggested'.
Suggestion: suggested
...ll area, which many students would have suggest, I believe, with that money all the com...
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Line 11, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with that money all the computers at the school can be upgraded. Eventually a new...
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Line 15, column 8, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend asking'.
Suggestion: recommend asking
...that are assigned every year. I also recommend to ask for clarity from Government,by sharing ...
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Line 15, column 52, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , by
...mmend to ask for clarity from Government,by sharing ideas how upgrading computers w...
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Line 15, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...udents in their career, which would help the school all in all to develop the sch...
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Line 18, column 37, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
... Please contact me if information is require for the latest computer system and proc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, while, as for, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1203.0 937.175257732 128% => OK
No of words: 232.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18534482759 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77379648463 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612068965517 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 355.5 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 1.44329896907 416% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2476899836 44.8134815571 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.363636364 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0909090909 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 4.34317383033 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.29896907216 302% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17571963176 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628018706262 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583133693406 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0595632648314 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535159213239 0.0580467560999 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 8.37731958763 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 8.71597938144 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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