A museum near your home is looking for people to do voluntary work You would like to do some voluntary work at museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary work In your letter Explain why you want to do voluntary work at the mus

Dear Sir/ Madam

I am writing for applying the part-time voluntary work in your museum which advertised at the museum website on 20 September 2020. I am a freelance artist and live near the museum and I would like to try working as a staff, even no paid, in this museum to give thanks.

I always went to this museum in my childhood and the staff were always kind and helpful. I dreamed to be one of the staff in the past. Also I just knew my next show would act as a staff in museum. Getting this chance, I could bring my dream come true and gain the precious realistic experience for my next show.

Before to be an artist, I have tried different jobs including tour guide and information desk staff of a shopping mall. I am confident and love to communicate with all sort of people, answering their questions and provide all necessary information to them.

As my career is relatively flexible, I am easy to adjust my schedule and match your schedule on the volunteer work. My earliest available date would be next Monday.
I am looking forward to have a further meeting with you.

Yours faithfully,
Mr Samuel TSE

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...paid, in this museum to give thanks. I always went to this museum in my childh...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the staff were always kind and helpful. I dreamed to be one of the staff in the p...
^
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...med to be one of the staff in the past. Also I just knew my next show would act as a...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: KNEW_NEW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'new'?
Suggestion: new
...e of the staff in the past. Also I just knew my next show would act as a staff in mu...
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Line 10, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to having'.
Suggestion: to having
...d be next Monday. I am looking forward to have a further meeting with you. Yours fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 928.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 204.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54901960784 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5379851663 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612745098039 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7582975267 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3333333333 76.5299724578 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 4.34317383033 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232138476316 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767049562927 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980387383036 0.0603063233224 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118158381485 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137511214184 0.0580467560999 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.