For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership.state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this.give details on how you have benefited from the club.explain why you want to leave

Essay topics:

For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership.
state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this.
give details on how you have benefited from the club.
explain why you want to leave.
Write at least 150 words.

Dear sir/madam,
I am a member in your local club and my membership number is 159852. I am writing this letter to discontinue my membership.
I have registered in the gold one for three months which gives me many privileges. this allows me to attend all classes including dancing, yoga and kick boxing. Besides, I can use the swimming pools all weekdays and practice in the gym with a private trainer for me. $ 1000 a year is the cost for getting this type of membership and I have already paid part of them.
Unfortunately, I will leave the town next month so I cannot make a good use of its benefits. As I paid around $750 and enjoyed these advantages for just one month. I would like to refund a part of my money because I will not come back to the city again. I appreciate your understanding and cooperation.
I look forward to your prompt reply before the end of April because I will move in the first of May.
Yours faithfully,
Beshoy

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir/madam, I am a member in your local club and my ...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: This
... months which gives me many privileges. this allows me to attend all classes includi...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$1000'.
Suggestion: $1000
... the gym with a private trainer for me. $ 1000 a year is the cost for getting this typ...
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Line 3, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p and I have already paid part of them. Unfortunately, I will leave the town nex...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e your understanding and cooperation. I look forward to your prompt reply befor...
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Line 6, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the first of May. Yours faithfully, Beshoy
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, look, may, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 773.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44252873563 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67806814319 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649425287356 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.955875549 44.8134815571 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.4166666667 76.5299724578 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.41666666667 4.34317383033 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177446078004 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607149011092 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061460010553 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902691790546 0.12726935374 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626826658634 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.7 8.37731958763 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.88 8.71597938144 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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