These days, computer games have tremendously affected children. They prefer playing online games for hours rather than sports. I believe that this has negative outcomes on the coming generations. this essay will discuss why the kids are attracted by them and explain the negative consequences based on this behavior.
The kids are trapped easily for many reasons. Firstly, he finds himself like a hero in this type of games by killing enemies by guns and challenging all obstacles he faces like Max Payne, well-known computer game . That is why he feels satisfied and proud of his abilities. Another factor makes computer games spreading among children is the internet. In other words, children can make new friends through playing games like Sudoku on Face book. Also, he can share his winnings among his friends. Thus, proving oneself as a champion and the internet are the main causes for this problem.
I completely reckon that many health problems and psychological outcomes will affect our children in the long run by spending long hours in front of computer's screen. The obesity has become increasingly common among our them because they do not have time to practice exercises and outdoor activities like running and swimming. Additionally, their personalities are changing negatively because they are trapped in their games and isolated from the family. The more time the child plays online games, the weaker they become.
In conclusion, the children are satisfied with video games rather than sports in the last decade. Meeting new people and being heroes to the others are the main reason for this attraction. I strongly believe that the health and psychological problems are major negative results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, so, thus, well, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22463768116 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5854979694 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586956521739 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0266719261 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1111111111 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72222222222 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330881932714 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956148258659 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662795786842 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204796645781 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0767130205006 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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