There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks.Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter• describe what the problems are• explain how these problems are

Essay topics:

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks.

Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter

• describe what the problems are
• explain how these problems are affecting you
• suggest what you would like the company to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ...........,

Dear sir/ Madam
My name is Mary Geralds and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the recent unreliability of your bus transport service in my area which is located at Ikeja Metropolis.

Until recently, the local transport service has been very convenient, prompt and trustworthy. The problem started when the previous drivers were transferred to another area, precisely about 14 days ago. Not only do the new drivers arrive very late to the park, they also spend time cleaning and arranging head rests on the seats, wasting valuable time.

This unprofessional act not only makes me arrive at the office very late, but has also made me receive multiple queries from my supervisor. Infact, just yesterday, I was given an official warning letter from our Human Resources Department to either improve on my lateness or be faced with a possible termination of my appointment.

I would be grateful if you could kindly speak to your drivers as the manager. Firstly, reorienting them about the importance of being early to their duty post and secondly, informing them about how their nonchalant behaviour is costing your passengers so much discomfort and stress. Should they refuse to improve, I would like to suggest that they be changed or made to face punitive measures.

I thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,
Mary Geralds

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1143.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14864864865 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85745045998 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.698198198198 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 350.1 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.1723003579 44.8134815571 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.909090909 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 4.34317383033 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126820708121 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466333805234 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348914051991 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062769963325 0.12726935374 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217215613205 0.0580467560999 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.