Write a letter to a financial organization that gives money to students who would like to take a part-time course.
Mention
- qualifications and work experience
- details about the course
- how this course will help you
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to request for the financial assistance for my course in Master of Business Studies at Oxford University, London as I belong to middle class family and studying abroad involves plethora of expenses.
After completing my bachelor degree in Indian Institute of Management, I am currently working as Senior Lead Manager in a Multinational company and having six years of experience in the field of Telecommunication Marketing. Also, my responsibilities include handling client interaction and explaining them about the features of the different products. Apart from that, I am active member of training and learning club of company which is responsible for honing the skills of employees.
The Master’s degree which I am going to do outside of India, involves studies of marketing, sales and human resource department that are critical part of any organization. Additionally, all the students will get the chance to manage a small company project where each member will play different roles depending upon their abilities in the last semester. Therefore, It will be a great learning course for any experienced person like me.
As my promotion to higher role is due in my current organization because of higher education requirement for that position, this course will help me to put my case in a strong manner. Also, this course will help me to ameliorate my business skills and one day I will be able to project myself as independent entrepreneur after doing this course .
I am looking forward to receive the positive response for my request .
Yours faithfully ,
Aman
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to club'
Suggestion: to club
... active member of training and learning club of company which is responsible for hon...
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Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...ve member of training and learning club of company which is responsible for honing...
^^
Line 5, column 465, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pany which is responsible for honing the skills of employees. The Master'...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...do outside of India, involves studies of marketing, sales and human resource depa...
^^
Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a strong manner" with adverb for "strong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...this course will help me to put my case in a strong manner. Also, this course will help me to amel...
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Line 9, column 345, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ent entrepreneur after doing this course . I am looking forward to receive the ...
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Line 11, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to receiving'.
Suggestion: to receiving
...g this course . I am looking forward to receive the positive response for my request . ...
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Line 11, column 69, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ive the positive response for my request . Yours faithfully , Aman
^^
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nse for my request . Yours faithfully , Aman
^^
Line 14, column 5, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...my request . Yours faithfully , Aman
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, therefore, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.85567010309 311% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 937.175257732 147% => OK
No of words: 262.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24809160305 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07894467641 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 127.690721649 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618320610687 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 290.88556701 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9110952744 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 76.5299724578 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 16.8248392259 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181391817559 0.216113520407 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619391503542 0.0766984524023 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598557334601 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0888241194431 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643744708165 0.0580467560999 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 8.37731958763 181% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 70.7449484536 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 8.71597938144 155% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 7.59969072165 126% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 41.2886597938 194% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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