Write a letter to your boss about your company's poor reception area and give suggestions

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your boss about your company's poor reception area and give suggestions

Dear Mr. Hammond,

Sequel to your request for suggestions on how to make the reception area conducive for our esteemed clients.

Needless to say, there has been a series of complaints from our numerous customers about the shabby and unconducive state of the lobby area. Some of the complains include, AC unit not working at its best, the seats are not enough, lobby not spacious and no form of entertainment such as TV and Magazines.

The reception is the face of the company, that is the first point of contact and must be esthetically furnished. It should also be comfortable for customers, as you know : first impression lasts longer.

To start with, I am suggesting that the front desk arena must be made wider by breaking the demarcating wall between the area and the redundant store, thereby making it more roomy. Secondly, the 1-horse power AC must be changed to a 2-horse power AC and the number of AC increased to two. In addition, a 54 inch plasma TV should be installed with cable Channels on it for entertainment. And lastly, the sofas should be replaced as most of them are worn-out and long due for change, also the number of seats should be increased as well.

I hope all these changes will be effected soonest, so we could redeem our reputation and satisfy our customers.

Yours sincerely,

Jane Sussy

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 142, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...nd unconducive state of the lobby area. Some of the complains include, AC unit not working ...
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Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tisfy our customers. Yours sincerely, Jane Sussy
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, lastly, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, such as, you know, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1108.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 230.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81739130435 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68122327081 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64347826087 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.6401067706 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.727272727 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 16.8248392259 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 4.34317383033 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104109110152 0.216113520407 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458865651068 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621198489176 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0592586560675 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713303507462 0.0580467560999 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 41.2886597938 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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