Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,•give details of your study plans•explain why you want to get a part-time job•suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

•give details of your study plans
•explain why you want to get a part-time job
•suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Kevin,

I hope you are good and this letter find you well. I am so sorry not write to you for a long time.
I am writing this letter to inform you that I am going study in London Economy College next term for postgraduate degree.
It will be continuing for 2 years and probably will finish on June 2020, at least I hope so.

However , since I got a loan a bank to cover fees of program , I found myself in difficult financial situation. On the other hand, my family can not afford my school fees during the education. Therefore I've decided to work for cost of living as a part-time worker which help me there.

As you are working in a De-Rossi Italian Fast Food Café as a waiter, I just wondered that is there any such restaurant such yours that need to a experienced personal?
It does not matter what kind of job it is because I really need a job .

I look forward to hearing from positive response in the near future.

All the Best.

Your Best Friend Jack.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rry not write to you for a long time. I am writing this letter to inform you th...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...une 2020, at least I hope so. However , since I got a loan a bank to cover fees...
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Line 7, column 61, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t a loan a bank to cover fees of program , I found myself in difficult financial s...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...d my school fees during the education. Therefore Ive decided to work for cost of living ...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...l fees during the education. Therefore Ive decided to work for cost of living as a...
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Line 9, column 144, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...such restaurant such yours that need to a experienced personal? It does not matt...
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Line 10, column 70, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...of job it is because I really need a job . I look forward to hearing from posi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, really, so, therefore, well, at least, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 802.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35869565217 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34396684275 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.690217391304 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6775941603 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.8333333333 76.5299724578 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.29896907216 186% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256765066557 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803883687413 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852267184044 0.0603063233224 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107017486348 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943637472685 0.0580467560999 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 8.37731958763 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.42 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 7.59969072165 90% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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