You are a student in a college but you are having some serious problem about the school information desk.Write letter to manager of university,-Explain what is wrong with it-Suggest some adiveces what they should do.

Essay topics:

You are a student in a college but you are having some serious problem about the school information desk.
Write letter to manager of university,
-Explain what is wrong with it
-Suggest some adiveces what they should do.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to give some information about our the college help-desk and to suggest a few advices in order to improve the structure of it to help to students and all employees of the university.

As you probably hear that the information desk has been complained many times by both pupils and parents due to inappropriate style and useless position in compared to all colleges. According to them, first and major problem is that students could not contact with it when they need to it and whenever they call the support desk, any one do not answer the calling. An another problem related to it is that the table is so far distance from all class' which it make inaccessible.

As a junior students, we would be grateful if you could take some measurements. For example, it would perfect if it build up near to dormitory of students and campus center. On the other hand, it could be perfect idea of having self-service laptops on the desk not to lost much more time to solve our problems.

I look forward to hearing from you positive response in the near future.

Your Faithfully.

Gokhan

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...nd whenever they call the support desk, any one do not answer the calling. An another p...
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Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a problem' or 'another problem'.
Suggestion: A problem; Another problem
...esk, any one do not answer the calling. An another problem related to it is that the table is so f...
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Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... so far distance from all class which it make inaccessible. As a junior stude...
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Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...o far distance from all class which it make inaccessible. As a junior students,...
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Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'student'?
Suggestion: student
... it make inaccessible. As a junior students, we would be grateful if you could take...
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Line 7, column 117, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'builds'?
Suggestion: builds
...ts. For example, it would perfect if it build up near to dormitory of students and ca...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s center. On the other hand, it could be perfect idea of having self-service lapt...
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Line 13, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r future. Your Faithfully. Gokhan
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, so, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 941.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.705 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62598076916 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5923515227 44.8134815571 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.625 76.5299724578 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253489702441 0.216113520407 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787254122816 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617816195082 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133023043434 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575107349916 0.0580467560999 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 8.37731958763 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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