Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear Mr. Sam,

This is to bring in your kind attention, that I am facing some technical issue in my computer system, due to which i am unable to perform my work on time.

As you are already aware that I am an design engineer and my total work is based on system only.From past few days my computer became slow and getting hang every after 5 minutes. Furthermore, when i am trying to restart it , it takes double time to start the system. Although, I tried to clear the unwanted documents, thinking that because of over loading and lack of space might be one of the reason of this problem. Still It's not solving the issue.

More over, due to encountering this situation my clients are waiting for the design to complete. I have to meet the deadline before it ends. Furthermore, my other projects are also inline, as i got informed by my consultant that other projects are ready for me to design.

Therefore, you are requested to resolve the issue as soon as possible, as i have explained the entire issue and urgency of the situation.

Thanks,
Mohsina

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...sue in my computer system, due to which i am unable to perform my work on time. ...
^
Line 6, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... As you are already aware that I am an design engineer and my total work is ba...
^^
Line 6, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: From
...d my total work is based on system only.From past few days my computer became slow a...
^^^^
Line 6, column 198, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...very after 5 minutes. Furthermore, when i am trying to restart it , it takes doub...
^
Line 6, column 223, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...thermore, when i am trying to restart it , it takes double time to start the syste...
^^
Line 6, column 419, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...t be one of the reason of this problem. Still Its not solving the issue. More ove...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 425, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...ne of the reason of this problem. Still Its not solving the issue. More over, d...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, so, still, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67015706806 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53463422602 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633507853403 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.5409758647 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125815795774 0.216113520407 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402689178798 0.0766984524023 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331895692752 0.0603063233224 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.072175829894 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335164852225 0.0580467560999 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.