Writing task 1 (a letter)Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details:– Why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?– Ask your friend

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Writing task 1 (a letter)

Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details:

– Why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?
– Ask your friend to help.
– Explain in detail how your friend can help.

Dear Priya,
Hope you are doing great with your health and spirit. I am writing this letter in order to seek your support in collecting a fund of Rupees One lac for the old age home where I am giving my service as a volunteer since last two years.
Actually, "sandhya-kutir" old age home has 120 senior citizens under its shelter to take care of them without any reserve. Now, the trust who is running this facility wants to set up a small workshop for these people where they can make various artifacts and earn their livelihood to be independent. Hence, we are in a need of fund as mentioned above to buy instruments and machines.

As I am aware that You are working as an HR manager with a good corporate organization where you might have a budget provision under corporate social responsibility budget for this kind of charity. We are pleased to gift a beautiful sculpture of buddha made by them for the cabin of your CMD as a gratitude toward the donated amount. I would request you to take our proposal forward to your management as well as to the employees so that whoever will be interested in contributing, can come forward and contact us.

I hope you will find our proposal in a service of the humanity and you will extend your helping hand to realize this herculean task.

Kind Regards,
Divya

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, if, so, well, as to, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1091.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 236.0 206.0 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62288135593 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87779877635 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618644067797 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8114039229 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.1 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 16.8248392259 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 4.34317383033 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175707792641 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572168892878 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460439202559 0.0603063233224 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103067954346 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512354600508 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.