You and your family are living in rental accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.
Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter,
1. introduce yourself
2. explain what is wrong with the furniture
3. say what action you would like the landlord to take
Dear Sir,
I am extremely dissatisfied with the furniture in our rental house. I am writing this letter to express my complaints and request you to take measures to tackle the issues.
I am a Chinese tourist, and we are taking a vacation in Melbourne. I was informed by my friend that your accommodation is a comfortable place to live in, so I resided in the house with my family yesterday. However, I could scarcely believe that the condition of some furniture is deplorable. First of all, there are various spider cracks and severe cracks on the mirrors. Additionally, the dinner table is unstable, and it vibrates frequently when having meals, which interferes with our dining experience. The windows in my bedroom are not soundproof. As a consequence, we are affected dreadfully by traffic noises and find it difficult to fall asleep.
I would like you to send a craftsman to my place and fix the table and mirrors on this week. Besides, I also ask you to replace the windows with soundproof ones that can isolate noises. I hope that the situation will be dealt with as soon as possible. If you require further information, you can contact me by email.
Yours sincerely,
David.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
try not always use pronouns as subjects of sentences, look:
I would like you to send a craftsman to my place and fix the table and mirrors on this week. Besides,
I also ask you to replace the windows with soundproof ones that can isolate noises.
I hope that the situation will be dealt with as soon as possible. If
you require further information,
you can contact me by email.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 205 250
No. of Characters: 947 1200
No. of Different Words: 127 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.62 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.746 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 70 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.775 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.312 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... take measures to tackle the issues. I am a Chinese tourist, and we are taking...
^
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... we are taking a vacation in Melbourne. I was informed by my friend that your acc...
^
Line 11, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...by email. Yours sincerely, David.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 993.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 205.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84390243902 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87869360284 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634146341463 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.531373839 44.8134815571 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.9285714286 76.5299724578 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6428571429 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 4.34317383033 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235596517214 0.216113520407 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065713480914 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503576771245 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140935771362 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0162794462128 0.0580467560999 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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