You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to your friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Ali,
How're you, my friend? How’s your family? We haven't met since we got together last year at my brother's birthday. Hope things are OK at your ends. I'm planning to study abroad in the USA; I do need your help.

Well, I'm going to travel to California to study PHD on science, as you know I want to improve my skills in order to get a great job in my country. So, I 'm planning to go there next July, and I will study for two years.

As you know, I depend on myself; my family has financial issues, so I can't request any money from my family. Here, I do request from you if you can help me to find a part-time job which will help me to get a fund to cover my requirements during my time there.

I know you are living there for a long time with your family, so I recommend that if you ask your parents to search for me about part-time work, I will appreciate that.
I miss you very much. Till I see you, send my love to your beloved family.

Lots of love,

Ahmed

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Ali, Howre you, my friend? How’s your family?...
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Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...e you, my friend? How’s your family? We havent met since we got together last year at ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...thday. Hope things are OK at your ends. Im planning to study abroad in the USA; I ...
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Line 4, column 7, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...the USA; I do need your help. Well, Im going to travel to California to study ...
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Line 6, column 71, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...f; my family has financial issues, so I cant request any money from my family. Here...
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Line 6, column 150, Rule ID: HELP_TO_FIND[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help me find' instead.
Suggestion: help me find
... Here, I do request from you if you can help me to find a part-time job which will help me to g...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 262, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r my requirements during my time there. I know you are living there for a long t...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...part-time work, I will appreciate that. I miss you very much. Till I see you, se...
^^^^
Line 11, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o your beloved family. Lots of love, Ahmed
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 32.9175257732 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 792.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.06153846154 4.54256449028 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.16142743883 2.54303337028 85% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6292943244 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.9230769231 76.5299724578 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 16.8248392259 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.69230769231 4.34317383033 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421357970986 0.216113520407 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149115685839 0.0766984524023 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895783030956 0.0603063233224 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251116496804 0.12726935374 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482508337217 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.2 8.37731958763 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 90.09 70.7449484536 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 7.45979381443 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 5.68 8.71597938144 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.4 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 41.2886597938 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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