You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help Write a letter to your friend In your letter give details of your study plans explain why you w

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
give details of your study plans
explain why you want to get a part-time job
suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Mehjabin,
Wish you and your family a very happy new year. I hope you had a fantastic start of new year and things are going well.
I have a good news to share with you. I am planning to come to Canada in the month of May this year. My wish of completing Masters in Computer Technology is finally becoming true. I am so excited for the course. I have been accepted by University of Toronto starting Fall 2023 term. I am currently looking for a part-time job and needed a small help from your side.
Though I am coming as a student, I wanted to work and earn a little money so that I can meet my needs. As you know my financial condition, I had to take a loan for pursuing my masters. So, in order to start early with repayment of loan I am planning to do part-time job or paid internships in companies.
I remember you mentioning that your uncle owns a convenience store. I was wondering if you could help me with the referral, it would be of great help to me. I hope to hear from you soon.
Give my regards to your family.
Love and Warm Regards,
Firdous Pathan

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good news'.
Suggestion: good news
...year and things are going well. I have a good news to share with you. I am planning to com...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... I have a good news to share with you. I am planning to come to Canada in the mo...
^
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ity of Toronto starting Fall 2023 term. I am currently looking for a part-time jo...
^
Line 5, column 157, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...erral, it would be of great help to me. I hope to hear from you soon. Give my re...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, may, so, well, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 877.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 207.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23671497585 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46862266833 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7584937448 44.8134815571 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.8125 76.5299724578 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.9375 16.8248392259 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 4.34317383033 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30662347889 0.216113520407 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952844293206 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650228797501 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144874456411 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806756128963 0.0580467560999 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.0 8.37731958763 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 84.68 70.7449484536 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 7.45979381443 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.42 8.71597938144 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 7.59969072165 90% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 8.62886597938 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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