Dear Priya,
How are you? I hope you and your family are fine. As you are aware, I have received a scholarship to study at Toronto University for Masters in Technology. Though most of the expenses are covered under the scholarship, I would need money for some expenses which will be arranged only by working part-time. As I only know you from the country, I would like your help in this regard.
The course is for 16 months which covers two semesters and one final exam. My classes would start from 8am until 3pm Mondays through Friday from September 1st.
During my wedding last year, I utilised most of my savings in the function. Post the wedding, I had left my job in Mumbai as I wanted to complete my studies and work hard towards this scholarship. I will be carrying sufficient funds while I come to Toronto, but it would be used within 5-6 months. As my classes would be done by afternoon, I could work part-time at a cafe or a restaurant for the rest of the day. Also, I could look for some work opportunities during weekends.
Since you have been living in Toronto for the past 10 years, you could refer to me to a friend or other contacts for a part-time job. Nevertheless, you could connect me with a recruiter who could help me find a job.
I will look forward to your reply.
Best regards,
Khushbu
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, nevertheless, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 4.92783505155 284% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1091.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 242.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50826446281 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52074583248 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 323.1 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9077714547 44.8134815571 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.1875 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.125 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329319942204 0.216113520407 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105545867011 0.0766984524023 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940538329971 0.0603063233224 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160161519382 0.12726935374 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13040819275 0.0580467560999 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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