You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend ask for:- give details of your study plan.- explain why you wa

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend ask for:
- give details of your study plan.
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Sarah,

I hope this letter finds you well. I'm writing to ask for some help with regard to finding a part-time job.

As you know, I was lucky enough to get the admission of Melbourne university for the previous semester. Now I am studying Computer science and technology in this prestigious university which will last almost 2 years.

In order to cover my costs including the tuition fee, the rental and daily expenses as well as the transportation, I have to find a part-time job. This way I can work and study at the same time which would be great for a new comer.

As you have been living in Melbourne since 5 years ago, you may know how I should apply for a part-time job. I would be grateful if you could give me some information about finding an appropriate job.

Speak soon
Rahi

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
..., I hope this letter finds you well. Im writing to ask for some help with regar...
^^
Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: NEW_COMER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'newcomer'?
Suggestion: newcomer
...he same time which would be great for a new comer. As you have been living in Melbourn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, well, you know, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 26.3917525773 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 665.0 937.175257732 71% => OK
No of words: 146.0 206.0 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55479452055 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 3.78020617076 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58059250645 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.678082191781 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 198.9 290.88556701 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8515457593 44.8134815571 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.8888888889 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 4.34317383033 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363850790067 0.216113520407 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137952851911 0.0766984524023 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920786690782 0.0603063233224 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224743302595 0.12726935374 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10811998251 0.0580467560999 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 41.2886597938 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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