You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help

Dear Sharon,

Trust you are doing great and I thank God I'm finally able to put pen to paper. I'm actually writing to tell you that I've been offered a provisional admission at the University of Toronto and would need your help in securing a part-time job.

I am coming to Canada for a two-years course and the course is Masters In Information Technology. The course will give me a better leverage in my profession in the future and will improve my CV immensely. It's actually a 12-months theoretical course, with a year internship at a given company pre-arranged by the college. The hands on experience is also without pay but it's ok by me.

However, I need to get a part-time job to aid in the tuition and living expenses as my current savings cannot cover all. In addition, working will give me an added advantage of improving my Curriculum vitae.

Nonetheless, I am asking for your help in securing a job as you are well conversant with the area and must have built your contacts. I don't mind any job, would prefer to work from 8am to 3pm as my lectures typically starts at 4pm daily.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Best regards,

Tiffany Thompson

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I'm
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Suggestion: I'm
...od Im finally able to put pen to paper. Im actually writing to tell you that Ive b...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...r. Im actually writing to tell you that Ive been offered a provisional admission at...
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Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...uture and will improve my CV immensely. Its actually a 12-months theoretical course...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: IT_IS[8]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...s on experience is also without pay but its ok by me. However, I need to get a p...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ea and must have built your contacts. I dont mind any job, would prefer to work from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, nonetheless, so, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 208.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61538461538 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68357098927 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644230769231 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0933507069 44.8134815571 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 4.34317383033 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219078489509 0.216113520407 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715712505477 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792715236262 0.0603063233224 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132737564068 0.12726935374 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0839653423657 0.0580467560999 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.