You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

• give details of your study plans

• explain why you want to get a part-time job

• suggest how your friend could help you find a job.

Dear Smith,

I hope you are great and enjoying your time there. As I discussed with you earlier about my interest in studying abroad, fortunately, I got an opportunity in New York, U.S.A to fulfil my expectations for improving my art skills. So I enrolled for advance full-time course for 6 months at an institution called ABC i.e approximate 10 km away from your residence. My departure date is near and I am quite busy in preparation for boarding.

To cover my study cost and also to meet out living expenses, I aim to get a part-time job there, as it is quite difficult to manage the rental accommodation and other expenses along with college fees. So, I want to assure the source of earning before I arrive.

I was wondering if you could ask your colleagues or friends living around for cleaner, gardner, housekeeper, nanny or any such kind of services they need. If you don't mind it would be grateful to seek your wide social network assistance for the same.

I am looking forward to see you soon.

Best wishes,

Alina

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
..., I got an opportunity in New York, U.S.A to fulfil my expectations for improving...
^
Line 11, column 163, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...such kind of services they need. If you dont mind it would be grateful to seek your ...
^^^^
Line 15, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to seeing'.
Suggestion: to seeing
...for the same. I am looking forward to see you soon. Best wishes, Alina
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 862.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71038251366 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73314739045 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.726775956284 0.622605031667 117% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2250805066 44.8134815571 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 4.34317383033 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296569027763 0.216113520407 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10573265156 0.0766984524023 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735715063808 0.0603063233224 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167451700341 0.12726935374 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716395991211 0.0580467560999 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.