You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:explain your situationdescribe the accommodati

Essay topics:

You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:

explain your situation
describe the accommodation you require
say when you will need it
You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inquire about the accommodation facilities available for the course seekers at your college. I am Alex Jones, an applicant of the forthcoming training course on "Time Management in Professional Environment to Boost Performance", at your college. I am hoping that you would kindly arrange suitable accommodation for me.

I am currently employed in Southern Ireland, as a Chartered Accountant in a multinational accounting firm. As you already know, the course I am interested in would commence at the beginning of July at Greenmount, Northern Ireland, a location far away from the city where I live.

I would like to take the privilege of describing my accommodation needs. First of all, I am expecting a small flat or at least a room for me. Secondly, I would like to dwell in a calm and quiet environment, as the tranquillity of the workplace is important to me. Lastly, I would be glad to stay close to the course venue, so as to save time.

I plan to arrive on 27th of this month and hence would request you to finalise my flat or room before I arrive. I will stay at this place as long as I have my training course, possibly till September.

Yours faithfully,

James Smith

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ost Performance', at your college. I am hoping that you would kindly arrange...
^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...range suitable accommodation for me. I am currently employed in Southern Irela...
^
Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...glad to stay close to the course venue, so as to save time. I plan to arrive on 27th ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, lastly, second, secondly, so, well, as to, at least, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 214.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79906542056 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15489781259 2.54303337028 124% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57476635514 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 323.1 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9624997772 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5833333333 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 4.34317383033 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25142691082 0.216113520407 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083962059866 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675607676023 0.0603063233224 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14287065318 0.12726935374 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751206046363 0.0580467560999 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 8.37731958763 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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