You are a student at a university in the UK You have recently lost your university ID card Write to the local police station giving details of who you are what happened and ask to record your details so that you can apply for a new ID card

Essay topics:

You are a student at a university in the UK. You have recently lost your university ID card. Write to the local police station, giving details of who you are, what happened and ask to record your details so that you can apply for a new ID card.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Sherin Emma, a second-year student at the University of Liverpool and my major is Economics. I am writing to report a lost identification card that I was provided by my university.

I respectfully state that on 21st December, I went to the local stadium to enjoy a music concert and had been there from 4.00 pm to 7:00 pm. After I returned to my room, at around 7:44 in the evening, I could not find my University ID. I am positive that I had it with me when I entered the stadium. I must have missed it during the concert.

I immediately notified the occurrence to the university dean and he suggested me to report it to the police station and have a copy of the report to apply for a new ID card. I waited two days hoping that someone might find it and return it to the university but unfortunately it did not happen. Now I would like you to officially record the incidence of my lost ID card so that I can collect a copy and apply for a new one. The ID has my name - Sherin Emma and number LUA-45874E, inscribed on it and is valid until 30th November 2020.

I would be much obliged if you kindly register my lost ID case and provide me with a copy of that to help me get a new one.

Yours faithfully,

Votes
Average: 6 (5 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat I was provided by my university. I respectfully state that on 21st Decembe...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t have missed it during the concert. I immediately notified the occurrence to ...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the report to apply for a new ID card. I waited two days hoping that someone mig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 32.9175257732 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 937.175257732 107% => OK
No of words: 240.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.1875 4.54256449028 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64771260764 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558333333333 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.8611295436 44.8134815571 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3636363636 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.72727272727 4.34317383033 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301302930217 0.216113520407 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976027180183 0.0766984524023 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846961092676 0.0603063233224 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158395430053 0.12726935374 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948441860215 0.0580467560999 163% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.02 8.71597938144 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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